this is my summary for the same passage ,the firston igave the main ideas of the passage with same words of the passage
The article indicate the importance of education for the children in early stages .Educatin in the first three years will enhance their potentionals to understand approxammitely 1000 words according to the American study conducted at Harvard University . The personality of children formed through first two years ,so the children need special communicatin in that stage in wich lead to the future character for children .Some social and economic factors may prohibit the children to access schools. Headstart is programme launched in America to provide suitable financial support for the children to access nurseries at the same age and play vital role to enable children of poorer families continue their studies .However the same programme so called provided good financial support for the poor children without their parens and the results were disapointing for this reason as well as for being late ,while the new programme called misouri have good results because of the two reasons that old programme neglected them.
This is a significant improvement, Sultan, and your blog post is now looking like a decent summary. I won’t give you corrections at sentence level, because I think that if you read this again carefully and use a spell-check, you can eliminate most sentence-level errors. At a wider level, I’d like you to think about two things – PROVENANCE and PARAGRAPHING, which I’ll try to explain for you briefly.
ReplyDeletePROVENANCE is about showing where your information comes from. You have already made improvements here, by writing “this is my summary for the same passage” and “the article indicate[s]”, but I recommend using the first line to give more details about the passage. Who wrote it? What is the name of the text that it comes from? When and where was it published (and why was it published)? You might use a structure like this: TEXT TITLE by NAME OF WRITER provides an explanation of the importance of educating young children and a discussion of the strengths and weaknesses of US programmes to finance the education of those from poor backgrounds.
PARAGRAPHING is important because it helps to organize the main points of your summary and makes it easier for your reader to follow. I think that your summary covers two main points – the benefits of education and the programmes of financial support that have been developed in the US. You therefore need a sentence to introduce the summary, and then a paragraph for each point.
All I have done is add a couple of spaces to your text, and suddenly it looks like a much more organized and effective summary. Have a look and tell me what you think.
this is my summary for the same passage ,the firston igave the main ideas of the passage with same words of the passage
The article indicate the importance of education for the children in early stages .Educatin in the first three years will enhance their potentionals to understand approxammitely 1000 words according to the American study conducted at Harvard University . The personality of children formed through first two years ,so the children need special communicatin in that stage in wich lead to the future character for children .
Some social and economic factors may prohibit the children to access schools. Headstart is programme launched in America to provide suitable financial support for the children to access nurseries at the same age and play vital role to enable children of poorer families continue their studies .However the same programme so called provided good financial support for the poor children without their parens and the results were disapointing for this reason as well as for being late ,while the new programme called misouri have good results because of the two reasons that old programme neglected them.
One last point I'll make is that it would help if you give your blog posts TITLES that will help you to identify them in the future. Keep up the good work!